Looking for some Review Feedback

[Asterisk]

As the title says. I've made a review video and if it's not too much trouble can someone give it a look and offer some feedback on it? I've made a few but next to no one watches em and I want to get better at this but without feedback I'm not sure where to really focus on improving. I just want to keep getting better at it and this seemed like a good way to get some constructive criticism.

 

This one is just the latest on Kara no Shoujo but there are others on things like Grisaia and G-Senjou no Maou if you prefer those titles.

 

 

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=C2ar_JHt2nc

[Insania]

When it comes to the speed in which you talk, at least in the linked video, I think you should slow down a little. Especially at the start of the video you talked so fast I as wondering if you had time to breathe. 

The speed at which you talked made it quite, although not impossible, difficult to follow along and understand what you were saying at times. 

 

Also, at 3:19 I would recommend not showing that kind of imagery. Personally it doesn't bother me, but your videos may be flagged and taken down with that kind of nudity. A simple black out, or just not showing those kinds of scenes will help you out in the long run.

 

That's all the tips I can muster. I did however enjoy the level of depth you went into about the story itself. You were very descriptive about the nature of the plot, themes, and characterisation without giving any spoilers away. Which is great, so keep at it.

[Nimbus]

I liked this review. I agree with Insania in that you should slow down your talking a bit, i had a little difficulty making out some of the things you were saying in the review.

 

With the things I liked, once again, i agree with Insania.

[Asterisk]

When it comes to the speed in which you talk, at least in the linked video, I think you should slow down a little. Especially at the start of the video you talked so fast I as wondering if you had time to breathe. 

The speed at which you talked made it quite, although not impossible, difficult to follow along and understand what you were saying at times. 

 

Also, at 3:19 I would recommend not showing that kind of imagery. Personally it doesn't bother me, but your videos may be flagged and taken down with that kind of nudity. A simple black out, or just not showing those kinds of scenes will help you out in the long run.

 

That's all the tips I can muster. I did however enjoy the level of depth you went into about the story itself. You were very descriptive about the nature of the plot, themes, and characterisation without giving any spoilers away. Which is great, so keep at it.

[bl3u]

That was actually a really nice review.

It's been said, but yeah. You're talking a bit fast, you need to let the veiwer take a breath every now and again. If you just naturally talk like that when you explain something I understand, a way to somewhat remedy the issue would be not doing as many jump cuts. Try leaving at Most, a second of white noise between your speaking. If you finish a statement then immediately cut to the next paragraph then it just seems like a giant run on sentence.

Also, the cursor, it's more of personal preference but I didn't like seeing the cursor the whole video. I don't know what software you're using to edit the video but I know some programs have options to remove the cursor completely.

I liked it overall. Gonna watch your other videos too!

[Asterisk]

That was actually a really nice review.

It's been said, but yeah. You're talking a bit fast, you need to let the veiwer take a breath every now and again. If you just naturally talk like that when you explain something I understand, a way to somewhat remedy the issue would be not doing as many jump cuts. Try leaving at Most, a second of white noise between your speaking. If you finish a statement then immediately cut to the next paragraph then it just seems like a giant run on sentence.

Also, the cursor, it's more of personal preference but I didn't like seeing the cursor the whole video. I don't know what software you're using to edit the video but I know some programs have options to remove the cursor completely.

I liked it overall. Gonna watch your other videos too