Darklord Rooke

Heh. Well, in the nature of giving people a fair go and this game a chance I'll look at what's presented objectively. However, considering this game is an RPG a big portion of the information I need relates to the combat system and overall balance. Instead, they spend half the trailer introducing pretty characters like they're making an anime ...

Good job, Winged Cloud, for releasing a trailer that shows us nothing at all!

The guy is either an idiot, or he's just a guy at a desk and the manual he's reading out of was written by an idiot. If you don't hear back from them, take it up with whatever consumer protection agency your country has.

Good call If it's brand new, should still be under warranty. Let them deal with the stress of diagnosing the problem :3

That problem really pisses me off. Had a desktop that repeatedly had that issue. Could be anything from Power related to faulty RAM.

I also saw NB get called a girl on the forum the other day. Not digging through threads to find it, though … too busy eating :3 working

Fate was translated horribly, it also rhymes with ‘hate’ which is obviously a sign. Ever 17 is boring and it’ll feel like it’ll drag on ‘forever’. Muv Luv is getting a new translation, so may as well wait. You included the words ‘Neko Para’ in the second option, which is code for ‘the Devil’ so that’s obviously out. Alas, it’s option number 5 by default.

Happy Birthday, @maefdomn. Hope your studies are going well.

The mistake is also understandable when you regularly identify with being a female on your profile page, Eclipsed xD

Which doesn't leave room for the nukige that's traditionally been their bread and butter. I would have expected at least a couple of new, sex oriented games. They always tend to sell solidly and take fewer resources to translate.

Erm ... I remember Gauss used to get me pretty frustrated. But most of it is too long ago to remember (dropped out of Uni to pursue writing and other interests.)

Yeah, but that’s boring. Impulse buying too many books, then finding yourself (inexplicably, mind you) suddenly living on the streets using a rat eaten, soiled rag as a blanket and scrounging through bins for food is the most exciting way to live.

Nuh uh. I'm glad people are feeling the same pain I'm feeling If you were having trouble with the Kindle app, you could have used a program called 'Calibre' to convert Kindle format books to normal ebooks, then just used a generic ebook reader Ipad app ... thingy. 'The Rook' ( http://www.amazon.com/Rook-Daniel-OMalley/dp/0316098809 ) and 'Dire Born' ( https://www.amazon.com/DIRE-BORN-Dire-Saga-Book-ebook/dp/B018L5DJN0 ) - I read these 2 books in the past couple of days and they're amazing. 'Dire Born' feels like a marvel, comic book series, where the main character has amnesia and though has good intentions ... becomes a super villain. Written decently. The Rook is another amnesia story though the main character is more of a secret agent. Written beautifully. Pretty cheap as well, at 5 bucks US for the both of them, I've been paying 8-12 each for ebooks recently and I'm hoping to find more cheap + good series xD Text books aren't as good on the Kindle, unfortunately. Easier to make notes, flip around, and hurl across the room when in physical format.

He's looking for physical copies, mate.

Rumour has it that Frontwing surprised people by doing a good job on this translation. Rumour has it that it's also released. Rumour has it that it's less than 3 bucks, so you might want to pick it up if you're a fan of Grisaia. I wasn't a big fan of Grisaia so I'll be skipping.

For everyone who liked the recent 'Gate' anime ('Thus the JSDF fought here', not 'Steins Gate',) the novel '1632' by Eric Flint is free on the Kindle. Definitely worth a read and it's the same sort of thing/fun

Ya just gotta practice. Confession: The below quote makes me feel good about not spending much time on social media: And where did I read this? ... er, on Twitter Good question ...

Not surprising. Postal services around the world are losing money hand over fist. USPS is increasing their rates, Australia Post is increasing their rates, and Japan Post is doing the same. And while I realise that Japan Post Holding includes a banking business as well, that doesn't mean they can let their postal service be a drain. Especially as they move toward privatization.

Suspicious posts like this make me glad I can't see anybody's signature :3

I don't usually glance at the list of birthdays, but for some reason I did today. Must be Fate, or something. Happy 40th birthday, @Zenophilious

That isn’t to say you shouldn’t tell, authors always combine bits of tell with bits of show, but you ‘tell’ far too much. And you exposition too much. It reads a little like a light novel, in parts. You need to fine a balance, but until you do the safest method is to err on the side of ‘showing more’. It’s one of the pieces of advice most often handed out because people always like to abuse 'Tell' in inappropriate ways. (Ew.) I would also advise you to read a lot more English books (don’t read light novels, some people think they count but they don’t,) and to meditate (like a Sith Lord, don’t forget the lightsaber) about techniques used.

@TheDeadApostle You should take note of this part of the critique. You tell far too much in your text, and you don't write in a way which allows you to get away with it. Because of this your narration comes across as dull Eh, I wasn't going to comment but you're in danger of dismissing some good advice so I'll expand on it a little. The biggest area you need to improve is building an atmosphere. You generally do this by showing (there are exceptions.) Allow me to demonstrate the extent of your use of 'tell' by pasting some paragraphs and underlining all the 'tell' within. Yes, I underlined all of it ... except for the guy's name. I'll pull up a different paragraph: Before you say anything, observe I didn't underline the word 'her' So, substantial no? Because you heavily rely on the use of tell, and exposition (and a tense battle scene isn't really the time or place) you can’t build an atmosphere. You could show the reader her magic is unsuitable through dialogue or through some magical attempts of hers, you could show the reader how his arm was injured, you could show the reader how the homunculi were combat oriented through details of their tactics and the ease with which they take control of situations, and you could show the reader the matchup was bad through description of the scenario. Showing the homunculi's sharp hearing by having them react to the light cough would have made things more real for the reader. There would have been an image in the reader's mind to match the conclusion you draw, and this would make the scene more vivid, more real. Without this piece of imagery, you’re just throwing conclusions out to the reader, which is what telling is. Showing is building a scene and allowing the reader to draw their own conclusions through the experience you’re giving them. No, you don't have to explain everything in the first setting, some mystery is good. In fact, there's too much exposition going on. Show is interesting, tell is boring. But the way you categorise people and things without showing them, and this is a problem of yours which extends to some pretty funky adverb and adjective abuse, kinda half-explains things to the audience and half doesn't. I just wouldn't go there at all until you can devote some proper time to it, and like I said the middle of a battle scene is not the time or place. Stuff like 'conventional female sorcerer' which then leads into a small piece of exposition into what she can and can't do just isn't cool. Instead 'show' a little of what she can and can't do in the opening scene, and expand on it later on, in a different one, when you can do it justice. Also 'ruthless' combat homunculi? Ruthlessness can be shown by what they've done, so drop that also. You don't even need to tell people it's 'Grand Capitol' library, a description of the library probably would have sufficed and introducing it as Grand Capitol in the next scene could have been better. Velociraptor's point about dumping 6 different terms in the one paragraph can be eliminated through more use of show, and less use of tell and exposition. So, yeah, 'telling' is what you first need to work on. As in it should be reduced. Probably substantially. Good luck

Hit shift + Enter Instead of only Enter And your problems will be solved. This piece advice will cost you 3 cookies. The bill's in the mail. Have a pleasant day

Tay, or should I say Aaeru, or should I say SolidBatman, or should I say Nayleen, or should I say Okami ... that Tay? Wow, I wouldn't be surprised if he's half the forum in disguise at this rate ...

Yes, and that doesn’t affect you. It’s content cut from the game arbitrarily solely so they could have a ‘non-full VN’ to offer the consumers for cheaper. I would also mention that the flip side is if the cheaper game + DLCs = the full price, then the game offered in the cheap version is being offered at better than market price. Which would tend to soothe the feelings of the target audience. You, not buying the DLCs, aren’t affected by this. Considering you’re buying the full game at full price and that full price hasn’t changed. I’ve noticed that many people arguing the worth of the DLCs aren’t people interested in buying the DLCs, only the full game. They, not being the target audience for that package, love to talk about its worth to them, which is very little because the package wasn't designed for them. But once again, why does it matter to you?