NeroDragon12

I'm currently translating this http://vndb.org/v9684.

So I just started translating this game http://vndb.org/v13470 and I wanted to check how accurate my translation was, because I only just started learning Japanese last year so at best I have to rely on chiitrans for some things, so I was hoping to see how good I was doing so far from someone proficient in Japanese. Here's the scripts: Edit:I changed it to the ones I had trouble with.