To be honest, you did a great job at making this review work imo. Your voice does come off as little bit flat, but personally, i like the way it sounds. It gives the review a welcome air of professionalism, which complements your reasonably precise and detailed breakdown of the game.
I liked the production too, your style sort of reminds me of Gigguk and HoldenReviews which made the review all the more pleasing to the eyes and ears.
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Overall, i didn't see much errors in the review. Either that or i'm just incompetent at constructive criticism lol. That said, keep up the good work. I would definitely watch more of your video reviews if you plan on releasing more.