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Edit: You don't actually need to straight up answer the questions ;P I couldn't place your accent because, for whatever reason, it reminds me of the British accent, but at the same time seemed different, which is why I was curious.

Ah, I see. I don't want to spoil it for myself, so I won't be opening the spoiler tab. Thanks for marking it. I had just wondered whether there was anything major planned or not I wasn't asking for the details. On an unrelated note I checked out your profile and quite enjoyed your about me thing. Also, seeing your YT, I'll say that I like your accent quite a bit, though I can't place exactly where it's from. Also, I see that you liked my post that had my story. What are you thoughts on it?

I read it, and it seemed pretty solid. The one thing I'm sure could be done just a tad bit better was when it mentions son, and Well, that's my two-cents on what you've got. Interested to see more. And from what I can surmise, the King may have some ulterior motive regarding... something. Haven't a clue as to what it is yet, or if it's anything at all, but the fact that he's a bit late seems fishy to me. Then again, that may just be me, considering the kinda shit I've been able to come up with in the past... well, he is a king, so he could just be doing King things. Whatever that may entail. When did you start writing that? Do you have any plans on where your headed with the plot - if it even has a major one in the first place - at this point?

Well, I'm in the process of fixing it as per sanahtlig's advisement that I do so, so when you read it, keep in mind that certain things have been/will be changed by the time you get around to it.

May I ask where your profile picture is from? Good luck on the finals. When you critique my story, I hope you enjoy it.

That's what I thought but I was making sure in case it meant something different. Good luck on finishing the dissertation. I hope that you continue writing. I enjoy the story so far, and look forward to seeing the rest. A brutal one, too. In my opinion anyways. How's the research going?

I knew what you meant by Allies, I was asking what an ex-Allied agent was, I've never come across that terminology and I wanted to know what it was. Holy crap, how far have you gotten with it? How long do you have before you need to turn it in? Do you ever have ideas for stories and just go with them if it interests you? That's not what I expected... Wow, that surprised me a bit. Romance between the two characters? For me, I try to stay away from romance in stories unless it has direct involvement in the plot (Like if it's centered around it, or a key element has it involved, something along the lines of that), which never happens in my stories. Though that's my personal viewpoint on that. The last two points seem more reasonable to me. What about concerning the protagonist's development? Any thoughts on how that might play out? So, was I correct about you being a Bio-medical Scientist? What kind of stuff do you study or work with?

What is an ex-Allied agent and what would they be doing with something that made them into a super soldier? So, you're a Bio-medical Scientist? Nice. How long does the dissertation need to be? Where do you get your ideas from other than inspirations by anime and VN's? Does it just come to you? What do you mean you edit each sentence as you go? As in, you check each sentence as it's written? That's what I tend to do. Judging by what you've read on my story, where would you say it's headed? I'm not looking for anything in-depth or complex, I'm just looking for where you think it's headed in general. I'm asking because I want to know the impression it gives from a second viewpoint. If you aren't sure, that's fine too. I'm just curious about the impression.

Does all of what I explained make the overall picture of the story and her character a little clearer? That first sentence made me smile. She uses whatever she can to kill people. Whether it's her hands, a bear trap, a saber or even a toothbrush, she will kill them with it. If it's not lethal, she'll make it lethal. She unpredictable, but when it's a certain situation, she is predictable in a sense. For example, when it comes to where she is/who's around her. If she's in the presence of certain people, like the commanding officer, or a general crowd she acts perfectly normal and won't do anything to cause her to be scrutinized. She waits until there's little to no people around to get the job done. That's why the whole military hasn't tried killing her yet. They aren't aware of what she does. She's able to keep it under wraps. One of the soldiers attempted to kill her, but that's because he got suspicious. I just remembered something in your story. Why did you abbreviate hour? It looked a bit weird to me.

Sanahtlig, I would like to apologize for last night, I was tired and didn't answer some of your questions with the amount of detail that I probably should have. I hadn't gotten much sleep the previous night and the tired started hitting me harder than I realized. Although I'm tired even now that I've had some rest, I should be able to explain why I did most of what I did in the story. Hopefully, anyways. Oh, and a bit of a warning for anyone else that reads this: Beware, large amount of text incoming. First, the reason she doesn't carry a gun. The simple answer, other than her preferring to use her hands, is the fact that she's, for lack of a better terminology, overconfident in her own strength. That, and If she carried a gun she'd have just been able to put a bullet (or several) in Ostromir's head and been done with it. Though in most cases she actually feels she doesn't need one. Second, her strength. She's not strong for no reason. There actually is a deeper reason behind her having it, in terms of plot. In fact, just about everything that I've put in has something, though it may not be immediately apparent, to do with the overall plot. There are exceptions to that of course, but gist of what I'm saying is that about 80% or so of what I've written has some meaning. Especially her actions. One that I'll actually explain is the fact that she ate. Had she not eaten and gotten punched on an empty stomach with that amount of force, it's likely that she would have died, if not suffered some serious problems. I'll just put the next ones out there. There's a reason she killed those two in the forest. There's a reason she punched the mirror. There's a reason as to why she killed the spies, and framed Ostromir for it. You get the idea. I've thought most of this out in advance, especially taking into consideration my plans for the story. In fact the original idea that this story came from, namely the first scene I came up with, hasn't even been brought up at this point in the story, and won't for some time. And I will admit that, yes, it's not exactly good for almost everything to have to do with something else, but the reason for that is the fact that I'm bad with thinking of scenes in which are mundane enough for the character to go about doing and it just being there for realism, so to speak. That's one of the reasons I'd asked for suggestions on that, because most of the time I'm unable to do so. If you have any suggestions, I'd love to hear them. One thing that I've wondered though. What makes her seem insane? When you first brought that up, I thought that was an interesting observation. One that I, surprisingly, hadn't considered. Ironically enough though, I love insane characters in fiction. Especially writing them.

So, it would be advisable for her to carry a sidearm in case things go south?

What if she did training to build her strength prior to enrolling in the army for the specific purpose of joining? Would that work? If it doesn't, is there a way I can make it work, seeing as how the antagonist (Nice job catching that he's the antagonist btw) has superhuman abilities? For example, I could make her have something similar but in some way different? Maybe it can be something that I could reveal later?

Was there a reason behind the anime series that you decided to choose? Would there be any way that I could make her strength somewhat believable? Also, what do you think of her reaction to the punch? Does it seem about right or should I add more detail? Do you have a suggestion to make it more of a reasonable reaction (i.e. it having a lasting effect rather than immediate ones, like not being able to keep down food properly and the like)?

How did the idea for your story come to you? Also, concerning your summary, what made you think that the guy has superhuman abilities? And what made you put your summary there in the first place?

That is an interesting detail to have. I assume that he picked up anime as a sort of coping mechanism for what happened to his father and sibling? Or did that stem from what's relevant to your own interests?

I've already got a plan in concerns to her killing ability and her skills. Is what I've got convincing considering her strength at least? 11 years ago? What made you pick your story back up? Also I noticed in Chapter 2 that your MC bowed. Did he pick that up from his habit for anime and VN's? Or was it a sign of respect? I'm intrigued by the fact that he likely picked up those mannerisms from anime. An interesting detail. Then again I could have seen a connection that wasn't there. That's always a possibility. Oh, and adding a summary for my story was a really interesting touch, I like that.

Yes, it did change. You did that very well. I enjoyed when the story took a slightly unexpected direction in Chapter 3. That's what made me want to read more, but the chapter ended. Nothing that I can think of made me want to stop reading, like I said I enjoyed it quite a bit. You use your words very well when describing scenery and actions. In concerns to your previous reply, she is very careful about what she does, making sure if she does something no one is in the immediate vicinity, though she got careless in the woods because it was mostly remote. Only when she's either alone, or she plans on everyone else being dead, is when she can go full out and when she shows her true colors/brutality. Though when she's angry (Like in the bathroom for example) she slips up on being careful and stops paying attention to things like her strength, surroundings and consequences to her actions. When she's in the company of people she doesn't plan on doing anything to, she acts normally, which is how she got recruited with ease. That and the fact that she is stronger than normal. You'll notice that from the way she broke the mirror, wall, and chair with ease, as well as how she survived the strong punch to the gut. A normal person would have possibly died from that. Also, the translation was for the reader in order to know what was being said, especially because the translation is through Google so I have no idea as to how accurate it is. Considering you know about WW2, could I provide you with my Skype so I can ask you for help concerning what I'd need to fix with the historical inaccuracies, expanding on/introducing characters, as well as any other things I may overlook? One last question. How long have you been working on your story? I appreciate you taking your time to help me point out what I needed to fix and showing me your story.

Here it is. Just so that you're aware I'm not too sure what a Polish soldier would have as an accessory, so I put the Star of David as one until I can figure out something more fitting. Keep in mind that where there is a different language being spoken, the translation is underneath. Sorry it took so long to post this, had to do things elsewhere. Also, beware, as there are depictions of gore in case that makes anyone uncomfortable.

Just finished Chapter 2. Sorry it took so long, had to do several things. So far I really like it. A couple of things I particularly enjoyed was the comment about Windows 95 being the best, as well as the "Geh." thing, mostly because it reminded me of a character from the VN Rewrite that said the same word. I've got a few questions at this point. Nothing bad, just some things that I'm curious about. 1. Are you still writing the story or has it been brought to it's conclusion? 2. Now, considering that this may be because I'm early on, I'm not exactly seeing any set-in-stone plot direction. Does it get more plot focused soon? I'm not saying that's a bad thing, in fact I admire the pacing and introduction to the world in the first and second chapter, I'm merely asking if a determined plot comes along at some point down the road. Now, what I will say about that is this. I do have some sense of it, being that it will likely have something to do with Sena, but again nothing set-in-stone yet, at least that I can see. Though I would understand if him coping with the whole accident is the central plot, but I'm not sure if that's what it is at this point. Sorry if that second question seemed a bit critical, it's just what was on my mind. I'm going to continue to the next chapter. In the meantime, can I post my story so you can provide your opinion on it? Thank you for your time and showing me your story, sanahtlig. It's a good read, I like it.

Already began reading it. I'm a couple pages in, and I like your writing style and word choice so far. And I'm quite astonished that you've written 41 pages worth. That's impressive. My story so far is 8 pages with about 3,000 words. What's your word count?

How many stories have you finished? Also, would it be all right if I showed you a story I'm working on? I'd like some feedback on it, if that's all right.

Thank you for that link, I've been searching for just that kind of info. Though it was mostly because a friend of mine had said Poland was primarily a pacifistic country and didn't have that large of a military presence as a result, and I couldn't really find that much to verify it. May I ask what you've been surprised by? Was it an idea you didn't think you were capable of? Or did you not expect where you went with your stories? Or maybe something else along those lines? I've only ever been surprised three times. All from three separate works, including the one I'm currently working on. Funnily enough it was all either something to do with brutality or a creepy coincidence. And the coincidence I didn't notice until I was finished with one of my stories and re-read it.