Velociraptor

False. The next person will post on a Friday.

False. Next person will post in binary.

4/10. Not enough dinosaur.

False. Next person is going to say false.

I've got a shocking confession for you all. Better ready yourselves. ... I like dinosaurs. Phew, it's good to finally get that off my chest.

It's a Velociraptor. Also, 8/10. Sparkly eyes.

A fan. whirrrrrrrrrr whirrrrrrrrrr whirrrrrrrrrr It calms me.

7.8/10 Too much edge.

False. The next person is unremarkable by any reasonable definition.

Damn, that is one sexy dragon king.

Could use more gold around the shoulder area.

You have consistently failed to understand what I am trying to say. I don't want to argue about this. I only want the author to improve. So I'll explain it once more for you and never again. I am not advocating longwinded explanations and introductions out of nowhere. I am not advocating that every term be thoroughly explained immediately after it is used. I am merely saying that dumping six different names and/or terms on the reader in the same paragraph and not giving any auxiliary information is bad exposition. But I've probably already antagonized you to the point where you won't listen to me anymore, so here's a video explaining the concept of the dreaded infodump for me: (skip to 5:40)

"Two young redheads were at the moment hiding behind a bookshelf at the far back of the deserted Grand Capitol Library. Evangeline, an 18 year old girl with her hair in a ponytail and Erik, a teenager of around the same age clutching his injured left arm. Theirs was not a good situation, and while at the moment they could barely manage, their chances of escape reduced by the second. An injured Beorcwisp and a conventional female jurojasper with jurojuro unsuited for the opponents and surroundings were up against 5 ruthless combat-oriented liffewagols. Calling it a bad matchup was an understatement." Simply by renaming the fantastic elements, the whole thing suddenly becomes unintelligible. Why? Because it is JARGON. It relies on the reader to know what those things are beforehand. The author knows what they are, and the reader *might* think they know what they are, but in the end it's just a bunch of random words that are thrown out all at once. This is not good exposition. This is not well-paced. This is not informative. It does not raise good questions. This is something that might be acceptable halfway through the story when you know what any of these things are, but it is not acceptable to cram all these random terms into the first *real* paragraph of the story.

You completely misunderstand. I am not arguing in favor on long-winded explanations on every little thing. I am saying that you should not dump a bucket of new terms on the reader without any explanation at all. It reads like a technical report and it's just plain confusing.

That's not the sort of "intrigue" you want. That's not even intrigue, really. It raises questions, sure, but you want people to be asking things like "What is this person's motivations?" not "Why does it feel like I'm reading a technical report?". It's jargon. The narrator is talking in jargon that the reader just does not understand. It's "mysterious" in the same way someone suddenly talking to you in Chinese is "mysterious". If you really want to improve your writing, hold yourself to these two rules: 1. Don't dump new names or terms on the reader without explaining what those names or terms mean. 2. Show, don't tell.

"Two young redheads were at the moment hiding behind a bookshelf at the far back of the deserted Grand Capitol Library. Evangeline, an 18 year old girl with her hair in a ponytail and Erik, a teenager of around the same age clutching his injured left arm. Theirs was not a good situation, and while at the moment they could barely manage, their chances of escape reduced by the second. An injured Teleporter and a conventional female sorcerer with magic unsuited for the opponents and surroundings were up against 5 ruthless combat-oriented homunculi. Calling it a bad matchup was an understatement." What is this, even? In the course of a single paragraph you've managed to go from "Two young redheads", to "Grand Capitol Library", to two hastily given introductions, and then to "Teleporter" to "conventional female sorcerer" to "combat-oriented homunculi" without explaining what any of those things actually mean. Is "18-year old girl with a ponytail" or "an injured teenager of around the same age" adequate as an introduction? I can presume that a "Teleporter" teleports things, but why is it capitalized, and how does it actually work? Does simply using teleportation magic (I'm assuming it's magic) make one a Teleporter, or are Teleporters a special class of magic user? "Conventional female sorcerer with magic unsuited for the opponents and surroundings" is just a mess. What makes her conventional? Why is it important that she is female? Why not "sorceress"? How is her magic unsuited for the homunculi or the library? Have you not heard of the concept of "show, don't tell"? How are the homunculi ruthless? How are they combat-oriented? Are they combat models, or merely better at combat than the average homunculi? Do they have the emotional capacity for ruthlessness? I don't mean to sound harsh, but you are off to a very bad start. You are putting too much information and too little detail into your exposition.

They might not be getting popular, but they are getting more popular.

Wew lads. Inciting Incident was a real doozy. Real psychological stuff. Well done. That said, I think it's a bit too difficult to survive the eponymous "incident". There are so many places to go wrong...

By that logic, China should be infatuated with Japan...

What am I even reading...

I volunteer for the People's Army of Kaguya! \ /

is love. is life. Embrace the

>Alright new upcoming rules is that the government will take 25% fee for projects funded in places like kickstarter >Those dirty greedy capitalist XD!!! u wot, m8?

The opportunities system is always available through the sidebar. The career agent funnel can be accessed by pressing F12 (and the game tells you this). You did not "have to" reset the game settings. You did so because you were too inept to do anything else.