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No

It's the day your mom pushed you out of her vagina. I don't get what's not special about that

That brings us to our next point: be nice to Ren

I have 3

Don't eat the sushi

Welcome!

Welcome!

Ay, welcome.

Welcome.

Welcome

Welcome

Blogs are so much writing. I hate writing

Happy Mare day hur

Add me to the list too even though I already got a free copy of the game

Obligatory comment to boost post count Wow! Thanks Tay!

I want in

Leaving stuff out doesn't make a translation any less wrong. It feels like you left the stuff you had trouble translating out, and that's just as bad as a misTL. These are bolded. There are also some word choice errors and blatant misTLs. These are underlined. Don't worry though, you've only posted less than 1 minute of gameplay. As such, the points below might not be a clear indication of your overall translation quality. Making something 'read' like it's originally written in English would take a degree of localization, and there is indeed such a thing as over-localization. I feel like rather than making the work 'read' the way you want (like a native English novel), you should try to convey what the original is trying to express. They won't. You mean like the 'edited' machineTL of AstralAir? *shots fired*

You are trying to hook VNR to a Chinese version of the game first of all

My poop Yup, definitely my poop.

Euphoria is fun for the whole family

I was actually kidding when I first recommended that game to you. I did not know anyone would plunge into that game willingly (as a beginner visual novel, nonetheless)...

Too lazy to correct everything, but the things that bugged me most:

Hadaka Shitsuji has a pretty good story. I recommend playing that