Darklord Rooke

Look on the bright side. At least you weren't with a 'lady friend' at the time

Haven't had that much time to work on it, but draft is done. I'd be further along the editing process but, you know, tennis (and Wawrinka specifically) is more important It'll be up less than 24 hours after I agreed to do it, though. Someone else will have to sate your thirst for scenes in the meantime.

Remember that fuwanovel literature idea you had a while back? Give an award to anyone who actually hands a piece of work in. Call it the 'You are a freakishly dedicated, highly appreciated, yet kinda scary member of the fuwanovel community' award

It's fine.

I was hoping you'd post something easier charmanderson Fine. Ear hygiene it is. I'll post something later.

I'm not really a fan of posting stuff on the net when I'm trying to get them published. Just doesn't feel right. And my earlier stuff is too embarrassing to put out. How about if you suggest a scenario, and I write a scene for you and post it later?

Cleaning too much can cause an outer ear infection. The odds are higher if you are using a pick or a spoon. One of the signs of an outer ear infection is discharge from your ears. @Mellow: No, not an artist. Unpublished writer yes, artist nope.

Could be pus. You can pick up an infection if you're not careful.

That doesn't sound at all stalker-ish. Congrats Down.

It wouldn't be that hard to do if you use an ear pick/scoop/spoon. I've caused myself to bleed a lot of times. My parents had one which was plastic or something, which was easier on the ears, but my one is metal and it hurts if you're not careful.

Happy to help

You should get a pre-paid credit card. You load money on the card with cash, and then can use it like a normal credit card. None of the dangers, none of the credit checks, all of the convenience, and your parents don't need to know.

*Races into thread* BLACKGUARDS people! Blackguards is almost upon us! Ahahahahahaha *Charges out* EDIT: http://www.daedalic.de/en/game/Blackguards

For anyone interested in SRPGs, The Banner Saga has just been released. Usually I'd link some screenshots as well, but it's hot and my GOD am I feeling lazy. Just imagine a wonderful SRPG that you wouldn't mind buying and that's The Banner Saga in a nutshell.

I don't mind short games. I come from a D&D background so I love the long RPG campaigns, but short and sweet is good as well. Game length doesn't really bother me, I'm more looking for quality. Polish in writing and gameplay, that sort of thing. I'd buy your game even if it was priced at $10 because it looks really good. Price it at 20 and I may have to think about it... 50 is right out I'm not sure if this is applicable, but I was reading about self-published ebooks the other day, and people are finding they get more success when they price ABOVE the normal amount. I think they said most people price at $2 and they got more sales at 4-5. Something about people seeing that price and thinking 'this is priced higher, it'll have higher quality' or something. Of course, your product will then have to back that up by producing more quality than the average product, but it's something to think about.

But didn't show it and it wasn't somethingt that felt was missing Spot on. You need to be able to imply things as a writer. H-Scenes can add depth to a character, that is true, but they're not really useful as scenes and therefore I don't see much purpose for them (apart from the obvious.). They're padding, it can be padding that expands characterisation, but good authors can do that in a scene which forwards the plot. It's one of my main complaints with VNs on a whole, too much padding and fluff. Scenes need conflict or change, they need to service the plot in some way. H-scenes don't usually do this, and a lot of times are needless bloat. Just my 2c.

I haven't been following this topic because I'm normally not interested in puzzle games. This, however, looks really good. I'll definitely pick up a copy when it's released. Is it only being released on Steam, or will it be available elsewhere?

Pfffft, yours maybe Sad to see they're struggling, even though I was never a fan of their games.

You are correct, it's not really a VN. I call it an RPG with visual novel elements, aimed at people who a)like SRPGs and b ) want something hentai. Being an RPG fan I can't get enough of it.

That was a damn good list as well.

This is exactly my position. Most of JAST's current line-up is interesting, whereas Mangagamer are releasing some trash at the moment.

It's a bit initimidating when you start out, but tons of fun once you get the hang of it. The old RPG rule probably applies to this VN (even though it's strategy and not an RPG) where you play for 5-6 hours to get the hang of it, then restart.

If you want a keyboard that improves your typing speed, you should get a DVORAK.

If the screenshots are accurate samples of your writing, then I don't need to play the demo. And if they aren't accurate examples of your writing, then they're pretty poor advertisments (you should post up-to-date screenshots.) A bit of context, I live in Australia, the land of hella expensive internet. It's even more expensive when you know that I'm using a wireless dongle. I know internet is cheap in the UK and the US, but it's expensive in Australia. I'm not downloading a half-a-gig demo when the screenshots (which are supposed to indicate what the game is like) are in such a poor state. When I said 'it sucked me out of the story' what I meant was your long sentences don't flow, they get clunky and I notice your prose rather than paying attention to the image your prose is creating. I don't know exactly why, but it's your job as an editor to be noticing these things. Maybe it's a case of redundant language or weak adjective use. They can really drag the longer sentences down. Does it take that much effort to edit a few screenshots? For example: "Avoiding any interaction at all is much safer than pushing it just to see how far I can get involved with someone before they become affected." I'm getting stuck in the middle of this sentence. I feel like I have to slog through it with effort and a paddle. I can't read a story with writing like this, I'd be hurling things before long. Maybe if we delete the redundant words, and do a bit of rearranging: Avoiding all interaction is safer than pushing things, seeing how far I can get involved with someone before they become affected. How about replacing weak words with stronger words? "Avoiding all interaction is safer than pushing things, testing how fond of someone I must become before they are affected." I'm still not happy (because I'm a perfectionist) but I'm not slogging my way through the sentence, which is a plus. On the con side, I might have just changed the meaning of your passage. "Once I got to arms distance, I crouched to match her height and flashed her my best attempt at a smile." A bit of a slog. Delete 'got to arms distance', most people just say they 'reached' her. Also you should be aware that 'best attempt' is a weak adjective, you don't have to change it, just be aware of it and limit their number. It's weak because it does a poor job describing the smile. You could opt to describe the smile in the next sentence, or use a stronger adjective (you could choose quivering, or tired, they're much better descriptive words. Best attempt could mean anything and is verging on being padding.) I'm undecided if 'match her height' is redundant or not. There's lots more, but I can't be bothered going through them. These are just basic edits to make the game readable. I don't think my standards are that high, but I don't want to be stuttering all the way through your prose. It frustrates me. Also, I don't insinuate. I'm rubbish with subtleties so if I want to say something, I just say it.

You guys should have edited it before it was released for public feedback, because showing unedited draft work doesn't get people excited about your game. I'm going to wait for the editing process to be finished before I give the game a try. There's redundant language littered all the way through the screenshots posted here and on the erogegames forum (1st screenshot above, 3rd screenshot erogegames forum, for example) not to mention the third screenshot above makes me scared there'll be 'talking head' syndrome all the way through your VN (your character recognised the need to search for an item, then started and finished the search without any description of the search process.) Your prose is forced and doesn't flow naturally, which constantly jolts me out of the story. This is what I'm getting looking through your screenshots. I'm a big supporter of the OELVN industry, but I have certain standards the writing must meet before I read it. And your VN doesn't meet it yet. Therefore, as the head-editor you have some work ahead of you. *Cracks whip* Mush!