EldritchCherub

False. Next person owns a season pass for a theme park.

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Well, this is awkward, we still haven't reached a concensus. Stray Cat, come over here and swing your gavel already!

Thanks. It'll take me about two days since it's bit longer than the usual posts on here. I'll do the usual line edits and upload it do MEGA or something else... if I can figure out how to do it.

Ah, okay. Thanks for that piece of advice. I don't really like Internet Explorer but I guess I'll make an exception. Hmm, I wonder why it does that, though. EDIT: Nope, can't copy the story in Internet Explorer.

Do you have a word document of your story? You can also just copy your story and put in the spoiler tags. It won't let me copy your story on the fictionpress website, so I can't do line edits. I can also just analyze the elements of craft in your story and simply format my critique that way if you prefer.

i dont mind critique so please share some on how i could improve.

@ERO! As usual, my line edits are in the spoiler tags and my corrections and suggestions are contained within parenthesis. Some problems you have with your story are inconsistent tenses, insufficient details about the characters that allow the reader to distinguish between the two, and also details about the environment which will help add to the tension of the story.

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Here is my review for Shinsekai Yori.

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Found this song while playing Sleeping Dogs and really liked it. https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=org1ITRGGNg

8.5/10 Nice variety of color.

I'll join for the next round, but I don't have a recommendation cause I don't usually watch Mahou Shoujo. I'll put up a small review for Shinsekai Yori tomorrow, I've been so busy with school.

True. Everyday is a great day to learn something new. Next person has gotten scammed off Ebay or Amazon.

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Welcome to the forums! There's lots of topics to choose from here, so just dive right in.

Welcome to the forums! Hope you like it here. Perhaps you'll consider sharing your close call with H-scenes and read about other embarrassing VN moments in this thread. http://forums.fuwanovel.net/index.php?/topic/8452-embarassing-moments-with-vns/

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Welcome to the forums and I hope you grow to like it here!